tell me what do u think about my new song

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  • ღرفيف الروحღ
    عضو ماسي
    • Nov 2008
    • 1443

    tell me what do u think about my new song




    ! Hello everyone
    ? How R U doing



    I wrote a newww song guys
    all by my self of course...somedays ago
    but now I'm still working on the melodies
    : Here R the words of the song " On my own "



    Today , I will go on my own
    Sorry..but I just can't live anymore



    Sorry cause I decided to go away
    Don't think there's a reason for me to stay



    Today , I'll go on my own
    Sorry..but I just can't live anymore



    I can't even smell , life ' s got no taste
    I only see the dark in my face
    I think I lost my smile forever
    Don't ask me to walk together
    ? Where could I get back my smile
    No , I must leave even I've gotta walk miles



    And today , yes today , I will go on my own
    Sorry but I just can't live anymore



    ?? How could U B that heartless
    No , I can't work with this..
    I'll go to somewhere , someworld , someplace..to be free
    ? I'm always sad , can't U see



    So I packed my bags and goodbye
    I'll try to live and maybe fly
    I'll try to find my love and rest
    I'll try to take my self always into the best



    ...So I will go
    Wonder if we'll meet again
    wonder if I'm gonna live...and love..



    So from now on , I will go on my own
    So sorry..but I can'tive like that anymore


    Ohhh...I can't live anymore
    ...



    ?? sooo..what do U think
    I hope U liked it
    I'm waiting 4 your answers


    C U
  • ::.. أحمد ..::
    عـضـو فعال
    • Nov 2004
    • 134
    • F A I L
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      لاتحسب المجد تمرا أنت آكله…لن تبلغ المجد حتى تلعق الصــــــبرا

    #2
    Hi SiS

    The SonG SounDs VeRy GooD

    BuT U Should FinD MoRe SuiTaBle WorDs

    In SoMe SenTenCes

    My BsT RgDs

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    • ღرفيف الروحღ
      عضو ماسي
      • Nov 2008
      • 1443

      #3
      thanks a lot dear ahmed
      I'll work by your advice
      thank you

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      • иσ ρяôмîsεs «
        عضو متألق
        • Sep 2008
        • 468

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          إستغفر الله وأتـوب إليهـ ..

          =)

        #4
        woooooooooooow
        Wonderful dear
        Very beautiful words
        truly
        I love it so much
        keep the good work


        Thank you, honey
        Your sister
        Rasha

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        • ღرفيف الروحღ
          عضو ماسي
          • Nov 2008
          • 1443

          #5
          U R welcome darling
          U know ? I'm so glad that U liked it
          thanks..that means a lot to me..really

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          • яă๓ă
            عضو فضي
            • Dec 2008
            • 527
            • "

            #6
            wo0o0o0ow

            very nice words

            i like it so much

            thank U sweety

            Dafa

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            • ღرفيف الروحღ
              عضو ماسي
              • Nov 2008
              • 1443

              #7
              Dafa dear
              U R welcome
              I'm very happy that U liked it sweetie
              thank U

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